Text Issues

[caquricon]

And when you have got 25 Test it says in the Fight Zone, Sannin i am not sure what should be there but Sannin is Naruto anime.

In the fighting zones after 25 FT's it has Sannin Level fighting zones. That is what he meant

[Ace]

"Ahh, sadly I have nothing today in the category Special Items.... okay, maybe tomorrow is a better day ." says the strange dealer.

Comma instead of a period.

[Hitsugaya-Taicho]

You end a sentence with a period, not comma.

[caquricon]

"Ahh, sadly I have nothing today in the category Special Items.... okay, maybe tomorrow is a better day ." says the strange dealer.

Comma instead of a period.

You end a sentence with a period, not comma.

Actually Ace is right.. grammatically after a quote when continuing on a sentence there is a comma before the quotation marks.

[Hitsugaya-Taicho]

Oh I see. My mistake.

[Neji]

fixed 

[Ace]

A Mercenary Camp

"Yes. As a matter of fact I am looking for someone." you reply. "I have gold in my purse to pay for the best fighter willing to join me in ridding this realm of vermin."

Comma instead of the period please.

[Neji]

done

[caquricon]

After completing the final test
Shattered around you lie the remains of once mighty items destroyed by the power of the dragon's flames. It seems 6 items have been destroyed.

Wouldn't it be better to have hollow's cero instead

[Neji]

The early ones don't have a Cero.
=)

[Ace]

"Are you looking for someone?", he asks in a gravelly voice that comes from deep within.

Comma inside the quote please since you are continuing the sentence.
Delete the question mark please.

"Oh, you have nothing I am interested in...", says the merchant.
This is when I have nothing to sell to the merchant.

"Ahh, sadly I have nothing today in the category Special Items.... okay, maybe tomorrow is a better day ", says the strange dealer.

You might want to take another look at the text for the merchant. There might be more text that might need to be corrected.


When choosing a bio avatar.
"Oh... I forgot... the local shinigami don't allow these sets to be used in public, sorry... choose a personal one if you like.", states Urahara.
Comma instead of the period and delete the comma after the quote.

[Makoto]

While plundering...:
Oh no! Seems you attracted a watchdog!
You try to play 'sit' with him, but apparently he is not eager to do so... yet wants to take a bite of your enormous ....
Bit - bite
I'm not completely sure about the fourth period on the ellipsis- I think that it should be there, as it's the end of the thought/idea.
Also, there's an unnecessary space beteen enormous and the ellipsis.

After you have run for a couple of minutes... just to make sure you left the dwelling and the dog behind you, you stop to take a little rest.

"Are you looking for someone?", he asks in a gravelly voice that comes from deep within.

Comma inside the quote please since you are continuing the sentence.
Delete the question mark please.

"Oh, you have nothing I am interested in...", says the merchant.
This is when I have nothing to sell to the merchant.

@Ace- Technically, only the commas need to go in the first two- the question mark can stay in the first one, since it is a question; the comma after the quote is unneeded in the second one because the ellipsis is used as the comma.

[Neji]

@ace done

@makoto
fixed, and the "..." are for a purpose.

[Makoto]

I know they're there for a purpose-- to show that a certain word is omitted.
What I meant was that there needs to a fourth period after the initial three '...' because it's the end of the sentence.

[Ace]

"Are you looking for someone?", he asks in a gravelly voice that comes from deep within.

Comma inside the quote please since you are continuing the sentence.
Delete the question mark please.

The sentence is actually continuing on, so a comma would make more sense.
At least that is what I think.